Below is the poem written out in standard form just in case it was hard to read in the Vuvox collage.
“Days and nights pass
As my future approaches
Faster yet. . .
Faster yet. . .”
“But I wonder if what I’m shooting for is really
What I want to do.”
“Should I stop?
Or should I move on?”
She delegates her future
As the world around her plays away time
Folding it in a million ways
Under its twisted arms.
If she stops,
Her children will see her more,
Be a bigger greater part of her life,
Be her inspiration
As a way to get through everyday.
If she keeps going,
Her future will hold more.
More responsibility,
More work.
But it is up to her,
She holds in her hands,
Freedom of choice,
Freedom of speech,
Freedom of life.
But only time can tell
The road she plans to take.
Will it be the bigger one?
Or the more beneficial one?
One year later:
“I have made my decision,
I will stop living the life,
Living the life of someone else,
And become who only I want to be.
I will be faithful to my children,
Myself. . .”
“There will be no more hard decisions,
No more terrible decisions.
I will simply live the life I want deep inside!”
“And with every step on that long road,
Life will come,
Faster yet. . .
Faster yet. . .
Faster yet. . .”
She has made her decision,
She will stop
And become who she wants to be.
Faster yet. . .
Faster yet. . .
Faster yet. . .
Here is my works cited for the images I used in the collage below.
Amps, Voodoo. "Voodoo Amps Custom Tolex Options." Voodoo Amps Home. Web. 02 June 2010.
"Black and White: on the Road Again." Bill Emory—Black and White Photography. Web. 02 June 2010.
"Contact Jane Bird - Autogenic Therapist." Autogenic Therapist | Jane Bird | Watford. Web. 01 June 2010.
"Facing the Cold, Hard, Cyber Truth. « Golden Acorn Homeschool." Golden Acorn Homeschool. Web. 01 June 2010.
"The Future - Television Tropes & Idioms." Home Page - Television Tropes & Idioms. Web. 01 June 2010.
"News from The Kingdom » 2008 » August » 11." News from The Kingdom. Web. 01 June 2010.
"Pining for the Sun : Starts With A Bang." ScienceBlogs. Web. 02 June 2010.
"Road Ahead for Pluggd.in? We Need Your Inputs/feedbacks." Startups | Small Businesses Resources| Technology. Web. 02 June 2010.
"Shooting Star - Stars Photo (5427028) - Fanpop." Fanpop - Fan Clubs for Everything. What Are You a Fan Of? Web. 01 June 2010.
"Youth Pastors: A Decade Into The Future | Open Source Youth Ministry." Open Source Youth Ministry | tracing the Path Together…. Web. 01 June 2010.
This was really really super duper good! The whole idea in general was amazing, and I loved all of your line breaks and such as haha. But great job! The Vuvox thing was a really cool idea and I liked how it wasn't just a poem, you turned it into something more creative. Nice job Alyssa! :)
ReplyDeleteI loved that Alyssa. I kept picturing your mom in it. I love your mom. But anyways, I really liked how you put it on Vuvox, it made the piece even more interesting, even though it was interesting anyway. I also like how there was something behind it, it was like a real life experience, which I think made even better.
ReplyDeleteI loved your poem Alyssa! I thought it was really neat how you put it into a vuvox. Like Natalie said since you had a real story in mind when you wrote this I could totally picture it.( I don't know if that makes any sense) Nice job!
ReplyDelete---Katelyn
I absolutely love this poem. I kept picturing your mom reading this, and I hope you shared it with her! Stylistically you have some good elements here too. I especialy enjoyed the concrete image of:
ReplyDelete"As the world around her plays away time
Folding it in a million ways
Under its twisted arms"
This is exactly the sort of concrete picture I was talking about when we spoke about poetry, and the need to write something others can become part of as opposed to a piece solely for your mother and you. Don't forget to stay in touch if you write more poetry!
I really like this poem, Alyssa. when you write poetry, it's as if you have been doing this forever. I agree with Mr. J, you should share this with your mom if you haven't already done so. I also like how you made the poem into a vuvox? It added a really neat element to it that you don't always get when you write with just words because the pictures can help you illistrate the story you are trying to tell. Great job.
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