Wind rushing through high peaks of trees
Screaming loudly between tiny cracks and crevasses in the sea of green
Whooshing past your ears
Brushing roughly against your face
The heavy beat of your heart
The sounds
The sounds of the forest.
Tall people swaying from side to side
Holding on as to not lose their lives
Shadows lingering in corners
Where animals await
The eerie streaks of lightning in the breaks of the tree tops
The sights
The sights of the forest.
Burning marshmallows and smoking leaves
Sending out a sweet aroma
Accentuated by the fresh pollen
The fresh cut grass and fallen trees
The smells
The smells of the forest.
Strange sounds, sights, and smells
It’s scary the way it works
The way a happy pleasant day
Can turn into a dreary, dark, stormy night
The mysteries
The mysteries of the forest.
Screaming loudly between tiny cracks and crevasses in the sea of green
Whooshing past your ears
Brushing roughly against your face
The heavy beat of your heart
The sounds
The sounds of the forest.
Tall people swaying from side to side
Holding on as to not lose their lives
Shadows lingering in corners
Where animals await
The eerie streaks of lightning in the breaks of the tree tops
The sights
The sights of the forest.
Burning marshmallows and smoking leaves
Sending out a sweet aroma
Accentuated by the fresh pollen
The fresh cut grass and fallen trees
The smells
The smells of the forest.
Strange sounds, sights, and smells
It’s scary the way it works
The way a happy pleasant day
Can turn into a dreary, dark, stormy night
The mysteries
The mysteries of the forest.
Oh wow Alyssa that is really good! I think you did a great job with using expanded vocabulary and I like how at the end of every stanza how you said something like, "the sounds, the sounds of the forest." Nice job
ReplyDeleteThis is a really good poem and i liked the repetition. Cool! You have a good way of describing things in a way that isn't easy, but clear. Good job. Keep it up! :)
ReplyDeleteGreat Alyssa! You clearly paint a picture in my head! Your vocab is great and you really know how to write poetry. I don't know if i would want to change anything about this!
ReplyDeleteThis poem really makes you feel like your in a forest. The thing you did at the end of the verses made it sound even beter. What's that called?
ReplyDeleteOMG i was looking at your playlist and i found my like favorite song by jack johnson! ahh cool! anyway this is really nice!
ReplyDeleteThat is really good. I can really put myself there, and I get a clear image of the camping trip. I also love how you refer to the trees as tall people.
ReplyDeleteI like the repetition in the poem. This is a really calming poem to read. I like it!
ReplyDeleteThat was an amazing poem. It made me want to go and lay in a forrest for hours just watching and listening to all the wonders that lurks around me.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful work. The way you crafted this with such stark symbolism, and purposeful use of words for effect, is stunning. Wow. You have a gift for poetry.
ReplyDeleteThat was a very nice poem there. You used good adverbs and adjectives, which really made me feel like I was actually in that forest. You have a real gift for poetry. Keep it up!
ReplyDeleteI love it! You could totally visualize the scene. I love forests so this made me happy. :) I love the voice you use in this poem. Keep it up!
ReplyDeleteThis is a really good poem. I can tell you worked hard to make it. There was plenty of voice and I could visualize the whole thing! I especially like the last verse. Really neat!
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